Picture inspired by John Todaro
Ticked away
Clocking countless
My blinded days
And dark nights
My trivial life
Seemed bliss
I fooled myself, believed
I’ll give death a miss
But love, you ain’t around
That wasn’t the plan…
O sinuous needle of fate
Gimme just a fraction of your time
A favor, my final breath
Go to our backyard
There’s a rose, still alive
Rest on its petal awhile
You have to travel miles
She’ll know
That it’s me
When she hales you in
Touch her heart
Then die on her feet
arjun bagga 
Love it.
Ah! I’m glad.
Very ‘sensible !’ The contrast of colors make it !
Thank you!
That’s great. I love the phrase “sinuous needle of fate.”
Thank you David 🙂
Fantastic poem! Love how it works with the Todaro tribute (he’s great isn’t he?).
Hey Rockstar, Thank you 🙂 Oh! He is awesome. Got a unique style, very focused.
I really would like to hear this read aloud…..by you. I liked it.
I do try to read poems I like aloud and never sure I get it right. 😦
Why do you think I’m chasing you with my quarters? I can’t narrate let alone singing. You should give this a try, in your way if you wish to.
No chance of my doing that. lol
But IMHO if we are writing for others to read our stuff, we really should want to hear how they read it. What is it that they see? What do they hear? Why do some comment on one thing and others on something else? That might be a way to tell if we really did get our idea over.
There really is so much more behind the few lines we write………than what is on the page.
But tomorrow we write something else and all is forgotten of our (master) piece of today. lol
WowowoW! Let this sink in, gimme sometime!
Times UP!
Oh, Master!
Un favore, il mio ultimo respiro
Vai al nostro cortile
C’è una rosa, ancora vive
Resta un po ‘sul suo petalo
Bisogna percorrere chilometri…
stupenda…
bravissimo!
ciao
.marta
🙂 🙂
Nice one!
Thank you John 😉
Very gentle and sweet…
I like your way with words. They carry the feeling which is what it’s all about.
Thank you 🙂
Oh, a rose in the sand ! Brilliant image !
Thank you!
Really lovely! I like the way the words percolated through my brain. 🙂
Thank you Carrie. I noticed extensive conversations happening on your new post, awesome that you are, so thought makes sense to return tomorrow, stupid that I feel about my not so profound views 🙂
I am honored that you read it and thought enough of it to leave a ‘like.’ That is more than enough for me. 🙂
Oh No! I’m working hard to look smart, you see. I’ll comment and what you do is say brilliant, WoW it!
Next week long I’ll be smiling then 🙂
Brilliant! 😉
🙂 🙂
I especially like “O sinuous needle of fate Gimme just a fraction of your time.”
Thank you Clanmother 😀
Ha! So i am done for the day. Will see you in a few hours lady budd!!
Looking forward to our next meeting!! The gift of time continues…
Yes, making me wiser. Have a good day! 🙂
If read as the title suggests – slowly, at ease – I can almost hear music. Lovely!
🙂 Someday when you running your fingers over the piano….
🙂
lovely…
Thank you Doris!
Deep and romantic….
Romantic and tragic. Nice.
Beautiful and haunting….
Sweet!
Very nice. Well done.
Thank you 🙂
I love this.., so beautiful.
Thank you 🙂
Warm Regards.
Arjun
“…If you love me – please never bring me cut flowers
Because I know that they will die soon after a few hours
I would feel that whatever the flowers represent
Would be equal to the time we have left to spend….”
Click here to see the rest.
It took me a while to find a way to express anything even close to an adequate response.
oh nuts! I did make the link to go to a blank page, but, well I must have messed up the code, bummer 😦
Bummer, you are too good 🙂 Thank you
What an incredible photograph Arjun-the simplicity, the color, the texture-it is truly beautiful-and it conveys so much with just two elements in its composition. Well done!
It left me with a bittersweet feeling. Loved it!
You left me with a bittersweet feeling yesterday. I loved it 😀
Haha bittersweet is the ultimate pleasure and fun 😀
Mean 😀 You just wait! My pen and images are itching to get back
I’ve never expected anything less from you 🙂
Aw! There comes a bucket full of chilled water. O poet, today ain’t your day…
Blush a little 😀
So……………..how’s the weather in your city?
I imagine you rolled your eyes at least 🙂 It’s a little cold right now but the sun is shining.
Please make a post of it. Serious!
About the blushing?
Nooo..How you’d like to spend you day
I was kidding. I don’t know if someone besides you will find my usual Friday night interesting, but if you say so 🙂
I insist. Add a picture, music along with it.A peep to your life.
Okay, you got it 🙂
Awesome poem and picture Arjun. 🙂 🙂 🙂
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