a guy on the phone
outside a bar i was in
he was relentlessly pleading
obviously to a girl
the barkeep and me were convinced
he walked in athirst
with tears in his eyes
“a double please”
and on the far end
a voice drumming the dead-end
our guy had reached
he bolted down the glass empty
fade out, fade in…
phone landed near the toilet door
and a lover at my feet
i rushed for the phone, gave my ear a check
“hello hello, what was that?” She bellowed
a familiar voice, i kinda felt
βgimme the phoneβ
the die-hard lover was back on his feet
“it’s still on” i asserted with a smile
the barkeep too smiled
he’s my friend
and i’m a gentleman
you know that
he grabbed the phone
“i blacked out”
she disconnected
Excellent photo expressing your words/theme so well.
Thank you Elena!
“phone landed near the toilet door”—better near the toilet than in it…
How was your week Carrie?
Well, no phones fell in any toilets, so I’d have to say it was good.
Once upon a time, there was a soul named Joy. He kept aiming at the hole, he never got it right.
π
Next post is my humble tribute to you
Uh oh.
Oh uh…Never buy the book but acknowledge the author! Joy says…
Haha. Good motto. π
Excellent snapshot of life… and the photo is also quite spectacular.
Thank you John!
Would make a good song. Can you put it to music?
D)
Yisraela
I’d like to be picked someday…
Mobile phones are terrible things..
What a gentleman you are. π
π π
this is great! I love it.
can’t resist reblogging this to Heart…all credit to you of course, Arjun.
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Fantastic Arjun!
Thank you for the kind appreciation. I’m so glad you came by. How have you been?
Great story. Yours always feel so alive.
Thank you for appreciating my writing. Feels good.
Good one Arjun – and clever use of imagery (and I don’t mean the photograph but your words).
Thank you very much Eric. 14 years of working in the movie business, visual sense of storytelling by default takes the lead and not the literary finesse π
beautiful picture π
Thank you Naresh π
THE pict reflectd 100%to THE poem…very creative and I like THE silhouet form…great Arjun!!!
Wow…I’m touched and healed. I can chop a thousand onions. So inspired π
It’s sad yet so nice. It’s hopeless yet filled with hope. How is that?
And the photo represents well the struggle…
You’re one of the very few who sees hope and warmth in my poems which honestly is my intention but merely as a hint.
And the photo is struggle but a representation of human spirit also.
Thank you so much Julita !!
π
Human spirit! Very true! I see it. It’s a great shot. As usual!
I love the ending of this poem Arjun, very clever.
Quite spontaneously that came up π
Wonderful image Arjun–and the poem-I thought I was standing next to you and the barkeep-excellent!
Ah, I’m glad you like my hopeless bar room stories π
Very much!
Aw, Thank you very much!
Intriguing! I have so many questions after reading the poem :-O a part two, pleeease? π
Hmm…You’re purposely doing this, right?
If not ask, I’ll write part 2
I ask! π
You’re one notorious, unpredictable but an irresistible buddy! I’ll never figure out what to do with you.
Perhaps you were the one our guy on the phone was talking to! π
Which means I should write about you as part 2
AAAAh! that would indeed make me notorious!! π π π <- see all those happy faces? don't disappoint them! :-p
Poor chaps. They don’t know what I see. Maybe they should go to Oslo and find out how many broken hearts end up every night in the bar because of you !!!
Now you’re just flattering! (Also I don’t hang too much out in bars – bars in Oslo are notoriously boring and expensive – or at least I feel that after recent travels)
I meant the guys you reject, men with broken hearts land up in the bar will tell stories of you.
aah π you’re still flattering! trying to get out of writing a story about me, don’t you? π
π I’m clear what to write about you. This is not a trap. I’m very much fond of you to fool around you.
On other hand, I can merely put up a post saying 4 messages from Ksenia in 30 minutes to me. Men on WP will burn and die.
haha! I cannot take this anymore! (going to hide blushing under the chair)
Ha Ha!
Thank you for dropping by Ksenia. You’re a pleasure to talk. Most importantly, my mind starts buzzing with ideas. People are nice here but some are very boring and stiff.
Have a sunshine day!!
Merci! And fun fact – the sun finally found Oslo today! I thank you π
Ah! Gracious π That’s the reason my buddy is vibrant today. Jolly good. Have fun!!
ah the complexities of relationships… Arjun, …. ‘twould be so easy if we could read each others minds…. then again, perhaps not !!! π xx ..(great photo shot too, )
Ah, absolutely not. They should spare the poets at least π
Your new profile picture is cool !!!
thanks… sometimes a change feels good.. π xx
Of course !! π
They call you Lady P. I like it too. But feels distant. I’ll try through π
Pen will do.. or Penny… ’tis entirely up to thee… π xx
π π
I think I’ve figured it out. You’ll see. Have a good day Pen!
Great photo and all the sensations of being right there in the bar with you or the narrator I should say. Can practically smell his breath. Sad story but then there are lots of sad stories in bars. Good show, Arjun, as per usual.
Yup. Lots of sad stories, I love to share them with a touch of wry humor while your encouragement makes me ponder over next π
Great post, Arjun. Really Dig it – very nice contrast betwixt photograph and text.
In other words, this is a clear sign I’m running out of images and text. Technically speaking, I’ll soon need a break !!
Huh?
A mix of exhaustion and a need to rediscover. Should be good. I’m curious by the way. What are you up to ? π
Ah, yes. Hope it’s productive and relaxing. I’ll miss your posts. I’m taking it easy mostly – with a bit of photography, an attempt to set up a print shop on Etsy (very time-consuming), and a lot of pondering.
I’m 7 odd posts away from winding up.
Hmm.. I hope “A lot of pondering” brings up new ideas and themes. Think video – youtube. Your love for music and street photography can come in handy. On my mind basically. That’s where I belong, as in cinema.
Wow, forward planning. It’s funny, I just kind of ground to a halt. I’m mostly just arguing with myself at the moment. Yes, good idea – it’s obviously a part of you – a lot of your writing is cinematic (and your shots are great).
Great image from your words! I love the photo too π
Thank you Kind Daffodil π
Beautiful photo, it reflect just the words from your poem……lovely, short and realistic story π
Thank you my orange friend. What’s next, I’m curious π
I’m gonna do the laundry π
The human condition is fascinating, ugly, beautiful, incredible, and you capture it so well.
Glory be damned, to be understood as an artist is enough and Eric, your comments are extremely comforting, always !!
Very clever use of imagery, Great story !
Thank you buddy !
Great Photo… Awesome poem… π
I told you you are brilliant, but you never want to believe me… π
My Dear Ela,
I’ll believe you if you promise to meet me for a cup of coffee on Saturday π
Your loving brother
A J
I love this!
Thank you very much ! Hope you’re doing good π
I love this portfolio of you! Excellent blog! Just the titles bring so many creative ideas to use for my own blog. Will you mind if I use a word every now and then? I like to think I am a bit of a wordsmith, but you seem to find the exact words that get your readers salivating to read on. π
Wow. Do what you like, take what you want. I’m already head over moccasin for you. π
silly bear. π
Like this piece, and the end.